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calling all oceans...
PollyReg


 1
you thrust
 2
 
 
 
 
christ's hand
 3
into a bucket
 4
of your mouth,
 5
 
 
 
 
birth me
 6
a fish
 7
for stylised breath,
 8
 
 
 
 
sculpt me
 9
in afterbirth,
 10
a bible for my bones.
 11

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12 Nov 16

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parts of knuckle, parts of pad, this is mostly foaming with digits for me ;-)
 — PollyReg

https://youtu.be/QEQkIEkxm7 k
 — PollyReg

this is heavy.  melikes.  maybe omit "your" in 5 and change "for my" to 'of' in 11?  although that'll likely change what you were trying to convey.
just my 2 cents
 — JKWeb

hey web, thanks for your comments...food for thought... :-)
 — PollyReg

http://www.abc.net.au/ news/2016-11-13/earthquake-hits-near-christchurch-generating-tsun ami/8021922
 — PollyReg

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